Talk:Irizarry industries/@comment-24562445-20150324143548/@comment-24562445-20150325004934

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I don't know anything about the structure of your scenario which this article belong to, if you ever want to write a scenario. From what I see, this is more of a timeline, than an article about the Industry itself.

You should read more from other great scenarios, like those of Ynot1989 (the Second Renaissance...) or Seiga Miyako (Desire Drive...), to have some grand idea what you should write.